Tiffany’s House of Burlesque

New Adult

CNF:  “Tiffany’s House of Burlesque” is written in first person, a very difficult point of view to accomplish without a lot of practice and a good handle on the written word. Unfortunately, this story could not be finished due to conflicting phrases and poorly written prose. Sentence structure doesn’t flow with an excess of “I’s”. Grammatical and editing errors within the first chapter alone, present too many obstacles for a reader to ignore. A strong edit may polish the story and give it new wings.


Sloane Austen/Tammy Grant